Antaheen

Characters :

Avik Choudhuri - IPS Officer
Brinda Roy Menon - Investating Journalist
Ranjan Da - Avik's Uncle and a retired person.
Uma Di - Brinda's friend philosopher and guide and also her boss.Well she is also the "still in good terms" separated wife of Ranjan da.No,they did not seek divorce.

These are the real life characters,the ones which are not as follows:

Raat_Jaaga_Tara - A GTalk ID
Boy_In_The_Box - A GTalk ID

Well Raat_Jaaga_Tara and Boy_In_The_Box are very close friends,offcourse over the web.They spend most of their time chatting whenever in front of their computers.This has been going on over a year.Strangely enough they still do not know each others name.They prefer anynomity.Both are comfortable sharing their feelings to complete starngers.

Raat_Jaaga_Tara -Hi u der?

Boy_In_The_Box - (He had been impatiently waiting for her to ping.Suddenly turns back and breaks his glass containing drinking water.)
You just broke my glass :)

Raat_Jaaga_Tara - How ?

Boy_In_The_Box - (He explains the reason.) Hey what is ur take on marriage?

Raat_Jaaga_Tara - Cant say.

Boy_In_The_Box - So are you?

Raat_Jaaga_Tara - Am I what ....married?

Boy_In_The_Box - yah

Raat_Jaaga_Tara - Not yet and I am quite happy bout it.How bout u...are u?

Boy_In_The_Box - Am I what - married or happy?

Raat_Jaaga_Tara - Both --- married and happy or happily married ?

Boy_In_The_Box - Married---- well not yet and happy ----cant say!

Raat_Jaaga_Tara - Its a very impatient day.Tis cloudy since morning but not raining.Wind is blowing but its not a storm.The portrait of Che Guevera in my room has been swinging since morning.My mind is very restless.You know what, there is a small antennae on the roof top which I can clearly see from here.A kite has stuck there and is unable to fly away .I feel bad for it :(

Boy_In_The_Box - You might feel bad about it now,however after it blows away you will start missing it!

17 kilos of Marijuna has been found in the outskirts of the city alongwith huge arms and ammunitions.Avik has spearheaded the operation.It was a huge success for the police department.The news had spread like wild fire across the media.

"May I speak to Mr Avik Choudhuri"

"Hello Sir,this is Brinda speaking on behalf of Star Anando.I would like to take a small interview of yours regarding the arms and drugs ceaze.Can you please spare some time for this"

"I am sorry,it would not be appropriate to sensationalize the case at this point as it is far from being over," saying this he hung the phone.

"What an arrogant fuck!"

Just then Ranjan Da calls Avik,"Come over in the evening.We can gulp down some rounds of Chivas!"

"Oh sure Ranjan Da!"

It was Ranjan Da's birthday.Uma di was pretty excited about it.She called up Avik to ask if he is coming down to Ranjan's house in the evening.She even invited Brinda to accompany her to Ranjan Da's house.

All of them met at Ranjan Da's place.Brinda was quite annoyed to learn that Avik was there.However they worked out the differences pretty well.After completing a couple of rounds of Chivas Brinda and Avik proceeded towards the kitchen to prepare some dinner.

"What the hell are these two people doing for so long in the kitchen," Uma di enquired.

"I know Avik very well.He cannot do anything so fast!" came a light hearted reply from Ranjan da.

"You will always point towards that one same point!"

"Thats the only valid point Uma,we are all bloody directionless commoners!"

Avik was busy cutting fine pieces of onions.Tears rolled down his cheeks.Seeing this Brinda was prompt to comment - "Oh my God ,a cop is crying!"

Avik took the knife in his hand and stretching his right arm towards brinda said - "Please take this and cut right here in the artery.You will find the colour of blood is Khaki!.Brinda I would like to tell you please do not engage yourself in the real estate scams.It is a very dirty line and would advise you to stay out of this."

Ranjan Da and Uma Di were pretty high and hence Uma di stayed back.Avik dropped Brinda home.They bid each other goodnight.

Brinda had not returned home till midnight from office the next day.Her mom called up Uma di who said that she had left a couple of hours back.Avik started searching for her.

The dashboard had hit against a truck.The left door was hanging.The front windscreen had been smashed.Blood was ticking down her temple.The colour was black.A bullet mark was clearly visible.The seat was completely drenched in blood.Avik felt the pulses.It wasn't there.She was dead!

A very mournful environment at Brindas residence.Avik entered the house.Her Mom was not speaking.She tried keeping her composure and not to break down.Avik entered through the front door and went towards Brindas room.

It was yet again a windy day.However a storm was fast approaching.Clouds were there but it had started raining.He entered Brindas room.The portrait of Che Guevera was swinging vigorously.Avik was shcoked!He turned his head and to his surprise a kite was hanging from the antennae on the roof top.

Avik still keeps looking at his laptop.He signs in regularly to find Raat_Jaaga_Tara not there.He takes the cursor over the offline name in a futile attempt."You look disturbed ," Avik's Mom enquired.Do you want some coffee?"
"No ,thanx"

"Sarakhon laptop ta niye boshe thakis,eto bhalobasha ekta meye ke dile toh kaaje dito!" ( All the time you work on the laptop,would have made sense had you given so much love to a girl!)

Avik did not reply.

Having a heart is one thing loving someone is another.Love although is fragile and very demanding is endless .It is .........Antaheen!


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  1. This comment has been removed by a blog administrator.

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  2. Very cleverly scripted... Characterization and pace both kept me mystified... Plot development was excellent... On the whole, an excellent read da...

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  3. loved it!!
    precise yet verrry attractiv narration...
    d element of mystery in it kept me hooked til d end!
    keep up d good wrk!
    lookin 4ward 2 read some more...

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  4. I was a bit taken aback by the revelation of the two characters camouflaged under the two gtalk ids at the end of the story and the mental trauma, through which Avik was passing.... Description was remarkable indeed!!!!

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  5. Boy_In_the_Boxda, gripping narrative. Interesing twists, very subtle introduction of the real estate scam bit :D

    You should write short stories. Not all have to be moral of the story wala types :D

    Good shtuff! Lets have some more!

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  6. dada ... khoob bhalo... write a movie script man. Fu@k NI :)

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